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(Please help proofread prior to publication: spelling, grammar, and pointing out any inconsistency or confusing section. Gameplay feedback not needed until later, we want to focus on getting the book to print).

Kaiju

Kaiju is the Japanese word for “strange beast.” In Em-8ER, the word represents both the smaller creatures players fight, all the way to the giant monsters that can rip bases apart with their bare claws.

The kaiju theme is central to Em-8ER. It is perhaps the most difficult part, both from a technical and budget standpoint, of the game’s development. It’s not easy to pull off giant monsters in a convincing way. This part of the vision book will be more exploratory than concrete in terms of its game design ideas. The larger budget and team we have, the more likely we will be able to pull off some of these concepts and features.

The Tsi-Hu and Kaiju

The Tsi-Hu are an alien race, so dangerous they had to be exiled and trapped in a time-loop so they could never advance. Their homeworld was filled with giant kaiju, and evolving alongside them and battling them on a daily basis made them a hard and ruthless enemy.

Over centuries, in their long fight against the kaiju, the Tsi-hu adapted and evolved. They gained the ability to shape-shift into their own mini-kaiju form for brief periods of time. In this “beast-mode” they would swarm and overwhelm the larger kaiju that threatened their civilization. Evolution selected and preserved this particular mutation of the Tsi-Hu to allow the fittest to survive. You can imagine a similar parallel if the dinosaurs of Earth had never gone extinct, and humans were forced to evolve alongside them. Perhaps whatever biology was responsible for creating such monstrous creatures also subtly affected the Tsi-Hu themselves and helped them gain this unique shifting ability.

Eventually the Tsi-Hu were able to master and control their kaiju. The Tsi-Hu captured and implanted kaiju with cortical control devices located at the base of the spine, penetrating beneath to the brain stem of the beasts. At first, they enslaved smaller kaiju, who they used in turn to defeat and eventually capture larger kaiju. They studied their strange biology, and learned the nature of their extraordinary abilities. They incorporated these into their own bio-mechanical weapons and some even experimented with splicing these abilities into their own beast-forms. They also began to breed and enhance their own unique kaiju, grafting them with technology like shields and weapon systems to make them even more powerful. They employed kaiju as weapons, and took them into battle.

The technology of the Tsi-Hu is itself a blend of biology and technology. Armor and weapons are grown as much as they are built. The energy to power these devices come partially from their ability to feed. The Tsi-Hu feast upon their enemies in beast form, and transfer part of the energy to the weapons and armor that are grafted to them. This grafting is organic and at will. Armor wraps around and bonds with a Tsi-Hu warrior, but can be removed and put aside. Weapons entwine with arms and graft to nervous systems and arteries when wielded, but disengage and go dormant when holstered.

Tsi-Hu Enemy Types

Tsi-Hu are the primary force that player’s will encounter in Em-8ER. They have two primary forms:

Humanoid: When in humanoid form, Tsi-Hu primarily fight from afar with ranged tactics. They employ armor and guns much as humans would. The difference being that Tsi-Hu armaments are bio-technological in nature. Humanoid Tsi-Hu will stay back and pick off, harass, siege or otherwise weaken targets with ranged weapons, while allowing beast form Tsi-Hu to move in for the kill.

Beast: A Tsi-Hu in beast form is a very frightening experience. Four legged and with bladed limbs, they move extremely quickly. They leap and dash in for the kill while their humanoid brethren harass the enemy from afar. In beast form, the primary attack of the Tsi-Hu is with their bladed limbs, which rip through shields to attack the armor and flesh beneath. Tsi-Hu beasts must consume their fallen enemies to sustain the immense energy required to remain in beast form. If they are unable to feed, they quickly revert back to their humanoid form. This gives the player a chance to interrupt their feeding or avoid becoming prey long enough to wear them out. Conversely, a Tsi-Hu beast on a killing spree becomes a dangerous thing, becoming more and more powerful with each kill.

Tsi-Hu variants: Tsi-Hu can come in several variants. Some might wear grafted organic power armor, or employ siege weapons. Beast form Tsi-Hu may benefit from several gene-sliced modifications derived from centuries of Tsi-Hu harvesting and researching of kaiju.

Kaiju Enemy Types

There are endless forms of kaiju on the Tsi-Hu homeworld. Kaiju enjoy a rapid mutation and evolutionary cycle, further accelerated and enhanced by Tsi-Hu genetic manipulation. In general, kaiju are classified by size and strength in ranked categories.

Category 0 Kaiju: These kaiju are the smallest kaiju, smaller in size and strength than Tsi-Hu beast mode. They are hive and swarm minded, attacking in packs. They are easily dispatched but dangerous in numbers.

Category 1 Kaiju. These kaiju are similar in size to the player’s THMPR mining mech. They are powerful but tend to lack extraordinary abilities or weapons, and are primarily grapplers and melee types. This is the category of kaiju most often encountered as a mini-boss by players who are escorting resource laden THMPRs back to base. This kaiju will engage and fight the THMPR, while players must defend and assist it in defeating the monster.

Category 2 kaiju: As large or larger than Category 1 kaiju, Category 2 kaiju are distinguished by their special attacks or abilities that make them more powerful and dangerous. They are rare and are often seen in quantity only during military invasions.

Category 3 Kaiju: These are towering beasts with fearsome abilities and extraordinary weapons. They are large enough to damage and destroy buildings, and pose a huge risk to all player built facilities. They are the siege machines of a Tsi-Hu invasion force.

Category 4 Kaiju: These kaiju are, thankfully, rarely encountered. They are so large that bringing one down requires a huge concerted effort by all nearby players. Only a single one might ever appear during an invasion. Category 4 kaiju are base destroyers, able to swiftly destroy a base before moving on to the next. They tend to focus on buildings rather than players in their attack patterns.

Category 5 Kaiju: This category of kaiju is an epoch event, a zone wide or planetary wide threat. This category of kaiju has never been encountered to date.
Implementation

We’ll build up enemy variety in stages, depending on scope and funding. The first ones we work on will be the Tsi-Hu in both stock humanoid and beast form. These will make an appearance in the playable encounter mockup which is the final goal of the mini-milestones prior to our Kickstarter. After that will be the Category 1 kaiju that attacks the THMPR. From there we will build more variants as time and budget allow.
 

Terricon4

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"Kaiju is the Japanese word for “strange beast.” In Em-8ER, the word represents both the smaller creatures players fight, all the way to the giant monsters that can rip bases apart with their bare claws."

Includes the word both, but later sentence structure doesn't support it very well. Perhaps something like...

...the word represents both the smaller creatures the players fight as well as the larger ones, all the way up to the giant monsters than can rip bases apart with their bare claws.

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"The larger budget and team we have, the more likely we will be able to pull off some of these concepts and features."

The should be added between larger and budget.

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"The energy to power these devices come partially from their ability to feed."

Come should be plural. That said this entire sentence feels to short on its own, and doesn't seem to add anything unique into the surrounding paragraph so perhaps removing it or expanding on it may be a good idea.

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" Humanoid Tsi-Hu will stay back and pick off, harass, siege or otherwise weaken targets with ranged weapons, while allowing beast form Tsi-Hu to move in for the kill."

Missing comma after siege.

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"In beast form, the primary attack of the Tsi-Hu is with their bladed limbs, which rip through shields to attack the armor and flesh beneath. "

Second comma is unnecessary.

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"Implementation"

No spacing between it and previous paragraph.
 
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Kaiju is the Japanese word for “strange beast.” In Em-8ER, the word represents both the smaller creatures players fight, all the way to the giant monsters that can rip bases apart with their bare claws.
There is something about this I do not like. I feel as if it should read: In Em-8ER, the word represents smaller creatures the players fight and the monsters that can destroy bases effortlessly.
Felt like there were too many words. Shortening it down just felt right.

The kaiju theme is central to Em-8ER. It is perhaps the most difficult part, both from a technical and budget standpoint, of the game’s development. It’s not easy to pull off giant monsters in a convincing way. This part of the vision book will be more exploratory than concrete in terms of its game design ideas. The larger budget and team we have, the more likely we will be able to pull off some of these concepts and features.

My take on this would be: The most difficult part to Em-8ER's game development, both from a technical and budget standpoint, is the central theme: The Kaiju. It is difficult to create giant monsters in a convincing way. This part of the vision book will be more exploratory than concrete meaning the larger budget and team we have, the more likely we will be able to fulfill some of these concepts and features
Something to the sort maybe?

You can imagine a similar parallel if the dinosaurs of Earth had never gone extinct, and humans were forced to evolve alongside them. Perhaps whatever biology was responsible for creating such monstrous creatures also subtly affected the Tsi-Hu themselves and helped them gain this unique shifting ability.
This sounded more like a personal opinion rather than a statement or fact. I would word it differently similar to: Their biology was responsible for creating such monstrous creatures that affected the Tsi-Hu themselves and helped them gain this unique shifting ability

The Tsi-Hu captured and implanted the kaiju with cortical control devices located at the base of the spine, penetrating beneath to the brain stem of the beasts.
They studied their strange biology, and learned the nature of their extraordinary abilities.
No comma between "biology and"

This is All I can do for now. I will come back ad edit more once I have more free time.
 

Dreamin

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I placed 'Mark'-ups within quote.

(Please help proofread prior to publication: spelling, grammar, and pointing out any inconsistency or confusing section. Gameplay feedback not needed until later, we want to focus on getting the book to print).

Kaiju

Kaiju is the Japanese word for “strange beast.” In Em-8ER, the word represents both the smaller creatures players fight, all the way to the giant monsters that can rip bases apart with their bare claws.

The kaiju theme is central to Em-8ER. It is perhaps the most difficult part, both from a technical and budget standpoint, of the game’s development. It’s not easy to pull off giant monsters in a convincing way. This part of the vision book will be more exploratory than concrete in terms of its game design ideas. The larger budget and team we have, the more likely we will be able to pull off some of these concepts and features.

The Tsi-Hu and Kaiju

The Tsi-Hu are an alien race, so dangerous they had to be exiled and trapped in a time-loop so they could never advance. Their homeworld was filled with giant kaiju, and evolving alongside them and battling them on a daily basis made them ( Consider changing repeated word, appears three time in sentence. Maybe specify which subject is being hardened.) a hard and ruthless enemy.

Over centuries, in their long fight against the kaiju, the Tsi-hu adapted and evolved. They gained the ability to shape-shift into their own mini-kaiju form for brief periods of time. In this “beast-mode” they would swarm and overwhelm the larger kaiju that threatened their civilization. Evolution selected and preserved this particular mutation of the Tsi-Hu to allow the fittest to survive. You ( If this is to be an audio edition, referencing the reader during the narrative is okay. For print versions keeping it impersonal is better; One can, Enthusiasts can, The adventurous can, and so on.) can imagine a similar parallel if the dinosaurs of Earth had never ( not ) gone extinct, and humans were ( had been) forced to evolve alongside them. Perhaps whatever biology was responsible for creating such monstrous creatures (add comma here, as the sentence reads it seems this should be kind of a force pause.) also subtly affected the Tsi-Hu themselves and helped them gain this unique shifting ability.(?, The line is pondering or questioning the possibility of something not stating it to be.)

Eventually the Tsi-Hu were able to master and control their kaiju. The Tsi-Hu (Tsi-Hu or They, as 'their' is used in the previous sentence continuing with 'They' would read best.) captured and implanted kaiju with cortical control devices located at the base of the spine, penetrating beneath to the brain stem of the beasts. At first, they enslaved smaller kaiju, who they ( which were or whom in-turn were used) used in turn to defeat and eventually capture larger kaiju. They studied their (Whom is studying who? Specify one and the other may be inferred.) strange biology, and learned the nature of their extraordinary abilities. They (Tsi-Hu) incorporated these (discoveries? breakthroughs? these what?) into their own bio-mechanical weapons and ( remove and, place comma after weapons) some even experimented with splicing these abilities into (the abilities with their own to create new unique beast forms.) their own beast-forms. They also ( Eventually they began, At some point they began, As one would expect they began) began to breed and enhance their own unique kaiju, grafting them with ( war, military, advanced, experimental ) technology like shields and weapon systems to make them even more powerful. They employed kaiju ( Kaiju were employed) as weapons, and took them ( were taken ) into battle.

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That's all for tonight...
Let me know if you don't want reasoning's or suggestions added.
 
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Dreamin

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Same as above, notes inside quote.
The technology of the Tsi-Hu is itself a blend of biology and technology. Armor and weapons are grown as much as they are built. The energy to power these devices come(s) partially from their ability to feed.(; the) The Tsi-Hu feast upon their enemies in beast form, and transfer part of ( a portion of, this reads a little better ) the energy to the weapons and armor ( bio-technology, bio-tech ; the reference/ inference has already made the association for this and will be a helpful general term for referencing the overall group later, saving the specific 'weapon' or 'armor' for discussing them individually.) that are grafted to them. This grafting is organic and at will. (The, Their armor ) Armor wraps around and bonds with a Tsi-Hu warrior, but can be removed and put aside. Weapons entwine with (in to, on to) arms and graft to nervous systems and arteries when wielded, but disengage and go dormant when holstered.

Tsi-Hu Enemy Types

Tsi-Hu are the primary force that player’s will encounter in Em-8ER. They have ( There are ) two primary forms:

Humanoid: When in humanoid form, Tsi-Hu primarily fight from afar with ranged tactics. They employ ( , employing ) armor and guns much as humans would. The difference being that Tsi-Hu armaments are bio-technological in nature. Humanoid Tsi-Hu will stay back and pick off, harass, siege or otherwise weaken targets with ranged weapons, while allowing beast form Tsi-Hu to move in for the kill.

Beast: A Tsi-Hu in beast form is a very frightening experience ( Seeing one in beast form? Meeting one, Making the company of? etc. It is missing the lead in, seems like its an audio excerpt.) . Four legged and with bladed limbs, they move extremely quickly (extremely fast, with extreme speed). They leap and dash in for the kill while their humanoid brethren harass the enemy from afar. In beast form, the primary attack of the Tsi-Hu is with their bladed limbs, which rip through shields to attack the armor and flesh beneath. Tsi-Hu beasts must consume their fallen enemies to sustain the immense energy required to remain in beast form. If (When) they are unable to feed, they quickly revert back to their humanoid form. This gives the player a chance to interrupt their feeding or avoid becoming prey long enough to wear them out. Conversely,(On the other hand) a Tsi-Hu beast on a killing spree becomes a ( an extremely ) dangerous thing, becoming more and more powerful ( gaining more and more power, re: repeat of become-) with each kill.
 
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Beast: A Tsi-Hu in beast form is a very frightening experience ( Seeing one in beast form? Meeting one, Making the company of? etc. It is missing the lead in, seems like its an audio excerpt.)
I think it more a general thing like:
A Tsi-Hu in beast form is overall a very frightening experience.

Or something like that
 
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